▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that it is more important for teachers to have good relationship with students rather than to teach well. However, in my opinion, excellent teaching skills are needed for teachers since their the primary role of educator is to teach students and unless(Need a sentence) they would lose their authority. (Wrong grammar)
To begin with, what teacher as a job a teacher's fundamental role is should mainly focus on teaching is to teach students well and make them equipped with a sufficient amount of knowledge. Their main role is to teach their students not to get along better with them. (Define topic sentence again with your own word) If teachers are able to teach their students well, students will try to learn and become informed as much as they are needed regardless of how much they are familiar with their teachers. (Awkward sentence) For instance, there was a survey conducted by Korean Statistics Office with 500 people as respondents. The purpose of the poll was to figure out the consensus view of people on whether teaching or good relationship is a teachers' main role. The majority of people ranked teaching over a good relationship with students. An overwhelming 95% of them responded that teaching should be considered to be the most important virtue of teachers since teachers who cannot teach students well are just like singers who cannot sing.
On top of that, teachers would be easily neglected by students if they cannot teach well. They would gain enough authority (Bit awkward to say "authority". If a teacher can hold such a strong authority, that must be related with "assessment in GPA") as teachers by having enough knowledge and appropriately distributing conveying it to their students. However, without it, it would be difficult for them to keep their authority from students. I would like to give my experience as an example to elucidate my points. When I was 17 years old, I took a history class from one of the teachers who were new to the school I was attending in. He was very kind and related well to students, but he lacked teaching skills as he had few experience of teaching. At first, students including me enjoyed his classes having fun together and chatting with him. However, as time went by, students started not to respect him as a teacher since he was too poor at teaching. As he lost his authority in the classroom, he had difficulties teaching us and soon he had to be replaced with another teacher. This experience has shown that teacher without great teaching ability would not be respected by students.
To sum up, teachers' main duty is to teach their students well and without it they would lose their authority as a teacher in the classroom. In this regard, I believe that teachers should concentrate more on teaching well than to relate well with their students.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 16-19 | - 잘못된 표현이나 쓰임이 잘못된 문장들이 상당히 많이 보입니다. 무엇보다도 in-depth analysis없이 피상적인 내용들이 보입니다. 예를 들면 그저 teacher's role 등.. 반대의 상황과 비교분석하되 신뢰된 자료 및 리서치 등을 제시해주어야하겠습니다.
|
|