▶ Your Answer :
What is the most
influential reference when people need to make choice of purchasing important
or expensive goods? Certainly, some people, if asked, might say that information
from friends or recommendation from magazines are fairly the things they take
into consideration. Be that as it may, I firmly state that reviews from online
communities has the biggest impact on nowadays. I advocate this position for
two reasons, which I will explore in detail in the following essay. First, it
holds opinions of various people and second, it is highly accessible.
First and
foremost, reviews from online communities contain every type of people’s saying.
To illustrate, it was when I tried to buy a laptop which is expensive and also need
to be used for long time. It was hard to get unbiased and professional
information. (Why's that?) Although I asked to my friends, none of them know well about
electric devices. Also, magazines were not reliable because the information was made and released by magazine from company which wants to advertise and sell their products. However, after I
searched information through online, I found that there were so many people
sharing their personal knowledge, reviews and even professional suggestions for
each and every laptop candidates I was considering. As a result, I could find
most fitted laptop product for me, owing to diverse advice and opinions in
internet network. It was the most influential resource for me to choose the
item.
On top of that, online
reviews are easy to access. (General statement, like supporting idea should be suggested here) According to a study conducted by Korean Statistic
Bureau, more than 75% of Korean internet users have the experience of online
shopping at least once. Also, roughly two thirds of the online shopping websites
provide well organized review platform of previous buyers. (Such as?) People even reported
that one of the reasons why they use Internet shopping mall is to check the
reviews and assess the quality of products. In this regard, it is not an
exaggeration to say that information of online reviewer are the most accessible
and also has great impact on people’s purchase.
To put it in a
nut shell, people care about online review the most when they make decision for
buying important things. That is because, online review contains various
opinions and is easy to access. In conclusion, I believe that online review has
the most powerful impact on people’s shopping decision.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 2 | Score | Fair 16-18 | - 완전 절에서는, 반드시 if asked를 comma를 사용하여 넣어주셔야 합니다. - 예시적인 자신의 논지를 대략적으로 설명하거나 관련아이디어를 서술해줄 수 있는 부분을 만들어주셔야 합니다. 또한 easily accessible/ various people's opinions이 왜 purchasing item할 때에 큰 영향을 주는지에 대해 서술해주셔야 합니다. 논지의 일관성이 다소 미흡한 편이에요.
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