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Some people think that it is more important for teachers to have good relationship with students rather than to teach well. However, in my opinion, excellent teaching skills are more needed for teachers since their primary role is to teach students and unless otherwise they would lose their authority.
To begin with, what teacher as a job should mainly focus on is to teach students well and make them equipped with a sufficient amount of knowledge. Their main role is to teach their students not to get along better with them. If teachers are able to teach their students well, students will try to learn and become informed as much as they are needed regardless of how much they are familiar with their teachers. For instance, there was a survey conducted by Korean Statistics Office with 500 people as respondents. The purpose of the poll was to figure out the consensus view of people on whether teaching well or making good relationship with students is a teachers' main role. The majority of people ranked teaching over good relationship with students. An overwhelming 95% responded that teaching should be considered to be the most important virtue of teachers since teachers who cannot teach students well are just like singers who cannot sing.
On top of that, teachers would be easily neglected by students if they cannot teach well. They would gain enough authority as teachers by having enough knowledge knowlege and appropriately distributing it to their students. However, without it, it would be difficult for them to keep their authority from students. 권위를 유지하는 것이 교사에게 왜 중요한지 간단히 언급해주면 좋을 것 같아요. I would like to give my experience as an example to elucidate elducidate my points. When I was 17 years old, I took a history class from one of the teachers who were new to the school I was attending in. He was very kind and related well to students, but he lacked teaching skills as he had few experience of teaching. At first, students including me enjoyed his classes having fun together and chatting with him. However, as time went by, students started not to respect him as a teacher since he was too poor at teaching. As he lost his authority in the classroom, he had difficulties teaching us and soon he had to be replaced with another teacher. This experience has shown that teachers without great teaching ability would not be respected by students.
To sum up, teachers' main duty is to teach their students well and without it they would lose their authority as a teacher in the classroom. In this regard, I believe that teachers should concentrate more on teaching well than to relate well with their students.
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