▶ Your Answer : disagree Some people think that universities should oblige their students to do volunteer activities because of its several benefits. However, in my opinion, it is not fair to force students to do it. If volunteering is obliged, it will lose its substantial meaning and can be a heavy burden to busy students volunteer work for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, volunteer activities lose its essential value by mandating it. Volunteering is meaningful only when it is done willingly , not for compensation because participants can realize its essential meaning such as feeling connected to others, and becoming a genuine member of the community. However, enforcing it makes students do volunteer work just to graduate, so they would seek to easy one, not one they are interested in. As a consequence, this makes it difficult for students to truly understand the value of what they have done. For example, there was a poll conducted by the university of Calgary with students who had done volunteer activities compulsorily or willingly as respondents. The majority of respondents who have done it of their will evaluated their experiences positively, but who have done it unwillingly rated negatively.
On top of that, some students don't have enough time for volunteer woks. They already have a lot of things to do, such as homework, sports activities, club meeting, and part-time job. Moreover, it is getting harder to obtain a job, which lets undergraduates spend more time and effort improving their resume than ever before. For instance, my friend was so poor that he had to do work part-time jobs during his university years. Unfortunately, he also had to do volunteer activities for graduation. Doing all these things must have been pretty tough, which leaded to his poor grades and health.
To sum up, enforcing volunteer works loses its essential value and makes busy students' lives more arduous. In this regard, I firmly believe that its disadvantages far outweigh its benefits, so volunteering activities should be done autonomously.
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