▶ Your Answer : The lecture and the reading passage both explain the origin of domesticated dog. The lecture casts doubt on the logic that the reading passage gave, in the point of how, when and where dogs became domesticated. First of all, the lecturer denies the wolf theory which the reading passage suggests. According to the reading passage, dogs evolved from wolves and trained by humans as hunting companions. By training, wolves developed some domesticated traits such as loyalty, and this made them to absorbed into humans, and the result of this process is the dogs from wolves. However, the lecturer claims that there would be lots of difficulties if humans tried to train wolves. Wolves' chasing down hunting habits would make humans more difficult to use them. Also, because of the characteristic that wolves usually becomes aggressive as they grow up, there would be difficulty on training wolves. Next, according to the lecture, the evidence that the reading passage suggests about when the dogs became domesticated is not proper. The reading passage presented the evidence that determines the length of the time that dogs have been evolving, by calculating from DNA. That dates the earliest dogs to 16,000 years ago. However, the lecture proposes another evidence. That is the foot print of the boy and the dog walking nearby, and the footprint made 26,000 years ago. Following this evidence, the argument that the earliest dog presented 16,000 years ago is false, because the evidence from the lecture proves that the earliest dog presented earlier, already. Finally, the lecturer casts doubt on the argument of the reading passage, about the place where the dogs started to be domesticated. The reading passage suggests that domestication of dogs started in China and spread to all over the world, by comparing genetic information from present dogs. In contrast, the lecturer claims that the outset place was scattered all over the world. The starting place was on Europe, North America, and Middle East, too. This is supported by the evidence that the dogs have four distinct ancestors, following the analysis on DNA. To sum up, the lecture contrasts the points that the reading passage suggests about how, when and where the dogs started to be domesticated.
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