▶ Your Answer : Some people think that a person is different from their friends. However, in my opinion, it is obvious that we can have some idea about what the person likely to be when we see the type of friends a person has/people have. There are two reasons. First, friends usually share similar personalities. Second, they often have common environmental backgrounds.
To begin with, people usually have similar characteristics as they get along together more often. Imagine that one person is is excessively active, likes to play outside and enjoys the thrill of the outdoor activities. There is another one who likes sedentary activities such as reading books and watching movies. Will it be possible for them to get along so well? The answer would be no. Something in common is one of the crucial factors to be a friend. 구어체/질문 형식의 문장은 TOEFL 에세이에서 지양해주세요. --> People are prone to get along with others with similar interests and tend to build stronger bonds by sharing what they have in common. For instance, I usually prefer indoor activities and my favorite hobby is to read novels. One day, I got to know a guy named James (이름 등을 구체적으로 적어주는 것이 좋습니다) and wanted to be friends with him since he was a good looking person and seemed to be friendly. However, all of his concerns were on the sports issues while my major interests were mostly focusing on books; it made us impossible to continue our conversation. This dissimilarity hindered us from being friends. (본 문장들을 읽은 후 내 주변인이 "나의 친구들을 통해 나를 알 수 있다"는 내용과 연결짓기 어렵습니다)In other words, it can be very easy to become friends with people who are alike.
On top of that, people who are friends have comparable backgrounds. To be specific, socioeconomic status is a crucial indications to expect one's overall characteristics. People with common status usually live together, increasing the chance of making friends with equal status. There is a study which have the purpose to reveal the factors that affect making friends by the psychology majors. It shows that there are many factors such as resemblance in personality, pastimes, academic abilities, and so on. (그 study가 credible source인지 증명되어 있지 않습니다 (기관명, 학자명 등 없음)) However, socioeconomic status was mediating all the links between possible factors and making friends. This result unveils the importance of sameness in their backgrounds. --> 본 내용과 주제에 대한 본인의 주장과 어떤 점이 연결되었는지 확인하기 어렵습니다. To sum up, considering the fact that resemblance in personalities and common backgrounds are important factors in making a friend, I firmly hold that a person can be comprehended from his friends.
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