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Some people might assert that it is as also important for older people to study new things as it is for younger people. However, in my opinion, studying when get older is not so much important for older people compared to younger people as as studying when people are young concerning that the young people utilize the knowledge more than the older people and they need the outlet for stress.
To begin with, the importance of studying when you are young is higher than when you are old because the possibility of you taking advantages from the newly learned knowledge is greater. This is because the young tend to take risks to achieve more in the future. Like the there is a saying, “no pain, no gain“, if you do not take risks and go on an adventure, it is difficult for you to be successful get success. For example, when I was in collge, my friend learned how to make an application for mobile devices. She started a venture company and utilized the application to promote for promoting her products. Even though she was in debt at first, she finally became the CEO of a top venture company in Korea. If she was an old person, she would have not been able to succeed success because she would have not taken a risk to borrow lend a lot of money. This shows that studying when you are young is more useful than when you are old.
On top of that, the young need to relieve their stress through learning new things. Mostly, the young works more than the old. As a result, the young people live a busier a more busy life and gets more stress from their bosses or traffic than the old. However, they can refresh themselves and get back on track after learning new activities. For example, in my case, I had a lot of pressure while I was am working at a company. Because I had to finish copious tasks everyday, I could not sleep enough. Since I started to learn learned yoga last year, I am was able to relieve my stress easily. As I got interested and enjoyed yoga, I was able to forget about work It was interesting and enjoyed the yoga, forgetting about the work. This shows that learning new things are more meaningful to the young because they get more stress than the old.
To sum up, considering the possibility of utilizing the newly learned knowledge and the function for as relieving stress, there seems to be no reason for contending that learning new things is more important for the older. In this regard, I firmly hold that studying new things is more important for the young is more important than the old.
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