▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that
gaining reviews from online communities are not good. However, I personally disagree
with the above idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, there are is a variety
of reviews from various people in online communities. Also, they it can help reduce time
to worry about whether to buy the products or not.
To begin with, we can see a lot of various people’s
reviews in online communities. Through hundreds of opinions, we can find both
advantages and disadvantages of the product. According to recent research done
by Korea university, 80% of respondents said that they can get more straightforward
and exact reviews from online communities than from recommendation of friends. This
is because it is less objective to (정확한 의미 파악이 어려운 어색한 표현입니다) gain information only from friends around
us. This clearly shows that we can get more lots of various information from
online communities.
Secondly, we can reduce more time to think
about whether to buy the products or not. With the development of internet, it is so easier extremely easy to
contact with many people simultaneously. If we upload something, people who see that post make comments and replies immediately. Let me bring up my personal
story as an example. When I was in high school, I had to register for some internet
courses, and I needed more information and reviews on that the courses because I didn’t did not have any information about that lecturer. At that time, unfortunately, my friends who took
that course already could not contact with me (해석이 어려운 어색한 문장입니다). Before I purchase taking that course, I
asked that on an by uploading a post on the internet community. As soon as I had uploaded, so many people made
comments which told me lots of were mainly about the disadvantages about that course. After I read
all the comments, I decided not to take that course. If it had not been for the online
community, I would have wasted my money on the lecture I hadn’t wanted.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that reviews
from online communities has have the greatest impact on people’s choice.
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