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Some people think that it is better to watch movies alone. However, in my opinion, watching movies with other people has many advantages than watching it alone. There are two reasons. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, people can comprehend movies better when they watch them with others. To be specific, by sharing diverse opinions about a movie, people could see the movie with a different viewpoint. I believe having a wide point of view is one of the most essential factors of success in this world. Imaging people only have their own thoughts. Their views will be so narrow. By watching movies together, they can not only gain diverse ideas about it but also broaden their horizon of the world. To give as an anecdote, I had used to watch movies alone. However, joining a university volunteering club, I made a lot of friends and it let me see movies with my colleagues. Although I had already seen the movie “Titanic” before, I got totally different thoughts after watching it again with my friends. I became to understand the movie more profoundly and realized that watching movies with other people is really helpful to broaden one’ view.
On top of that, people can strengthen their friendship by watching something together. To explain, after watching movies with different persons, people unconsciously think that they have something in common, and it makes people have more friendly and favorable feelings with each other. For example, my friends Sally and Rosa had been estranged each other since they fought last year. However, last month, they met at theater by chance and watched same movie together. Thanks to the movie, they started talking again, and it was a chance that they became best friends started to talk again thereby becoming best friends. Thus this anecdote proves that watching movies with friends can develop a relationship.
To sum up, going to movies with friends help people understand a movie better. Moreover, it could tighten their friendship. In this regard, I firmly believe that seeing movies with friends is more helpful than watching them alone for the reasons I mentioned above.
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