▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that, we cannot know a
lot about person by the friends they have. However, in my opinion, we can get
more information through their friends. This is because people meet people of similar
characters, and they can copy to closer friend’s habit. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, people get a friendship to
had a similar characters people people become friends who have similar characteristic. There are give to comfortable and good relationship They can have a good relationship (동사가 두 개 입니다).
For instance, I went to the Taiwan with my friend for traveling. After good
moment, we arrived into the airport at 11am for back to the Korea to come back to Korea. But we
realized airplane was gone at 2 am. This is because we have mistake that words ‘am’ and ‘pm’. If the friend make me crazy, which is give more hard to me.
Fortunately, she didn’t make it and we bought ticket
for Korea so faster. (예시가 주제와 무슨 관련이 있는지 전혀 모르겠습니다)
On top of that, more closer relationship
get to the habit of friends. According to Korea saying, children is mirror of
parent. That is I am mirror of friend such as the attitude, thinking and
personality. A study was conducted observation about groups of freshman into
the university. As a result, many freshman to be take the atmosphere of the
department for increase friendship among student.
To sum up, people want to similar
personality and take a thier’s habit through
interpersonal. Therefore, I feel that we can get a lot of information through
their friends.
점수: 20 일단 지금 이 에세이를 읽으면서 느낀것은 전체적으로 내용이 빈약하고 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 특히 첫 번째 바디 단락 같은 경우에 있어서는 예시가 주제를 벗어난 거 같습니다. 두 번째 바디 단락 같은 경우는 내용이 너무 빈약하다 보니 이 에세이를 통하여서 무엇을 전달하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 따라서 좀 더 구체적으로 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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