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Some people might say that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. They believe wide knowledge can have various type of jobs. However, I think specializing in specific subject is more efficient. This is due to the fact that experts usually earn more money then others and job usually asked specific knowledge in work for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, who specialize in specific subject can earn more money people can earn more money. Such as doctor, scientist and teacher. They Many jobs such as doctor, scientist and teacher are experts in their field with specific subjects. They have own knowledge that general people do not have it. So they are deserved to earn more money than other in a way they deserve the higher profit. Spending amount of money to various different type of subjects can be money wasted (이 문장을 통하여서 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인가요?). Learn Learning one specific subjects deeply can be more efficient. For example, I have been learn lots of thing such as art, piano, english, swimming and math learned a lot of wide knowledge. My mom spend amount of money for my academy. But my present job is worker at company. The art, piano, and swimming did not affect to my job and I can not remember those knowledge. It is kind of wasting money. However, my sister is experts in art. She had been learn only art instead of learning other thing. And now, she earn much more money than me with art. has learned only art.
Secondly, most of job is related to one or two specific subject. Actually it means we do not have to learn other various knowledge. In can be time wasting to learn different type of academic subjects. Jobs are asking to do some of the work in one field. It is not so useful. For example, I have friend who really wants to learn many things. She is intense person. So she learned computer, photoshop, Japanese, English and cooking, she got lots of license. Unfortunately, she get in to computer company. That company only ask her to use computer. Her license was not necessary. So she was down for a while. She regretted to spend time for get a license. That is why I think having knowledge in specific subject is better.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better to have broad knowledge, specialize in one specific subject. Specialize in narrow field is best way to save money and time.
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