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Some people think that grandparents can
give proper advice to their grandchildren due to their life experiences.
However, in my opinion, they cannot give good advice to their grandchildren.
This is because the era they lived in is different from now. Also when children have
a problem, they tend to talk with their friends.
First, grandparents thoughts and advices would be too
old.out-dated. Many things have changed for in decades. Let’s say that there was something
that was important in grandparents’ era. However, it is not fit for this society
anymore. People’s thoughts, behaviors and other personal traits something like that have been changed
by alongside rapid social revolution. For example, when I was in elementary school, I
lived with my parents and grandmother. So I had many time interactions with my grandma and
talked to her much.a lot. One day, when I told her my anxiety about relationship of
with my friends, she listened to me carefully and gave some advice about that. After
that day, I followed my grandmother’s advice and my friends thought I was
strange. Their priority priorities and thoughts were different from what she my grandmother had told me. As a
result, I could not solve that problem with the advice and later, I resolved it
with the help from another friend
Second, nowadays, children spend much a lot of time
with their friends and they rely on them when they need help. So when they have a problem, they are
inclined to consult with friends. This is because young people hang out with their
friends they and can understand their worry,worries mind and situations better so which allows them to they can
get more gain and give more helpful advice. There was a survey conducted by Seoul National University.
The respondents were middle school students and the purpose was to confirm how
children obtained some advice when they need. needed it. The majority of students consulted
their anxiety with their most friendly friend best friends first. An overwhelming 90%
responded that a friend was the first they to find found out about their problems. This was mainly because
they spend lots of time together so they can rely on each other.
To sum up, the advice from the time of
grandparent does not fit on modern society. Moreover, children prefer to get
advice from their friends better. In this regard, I think that grandparents are not
able to give helpful advice to their grandchildren
[Score] 20-21
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