▶ Your Answer :
Some people think
that one deep specific skill is enough for them to
succeed in live. However, in my opinion, I believe that knowing various skills
is better than learning just one skill. One reason is that it is required to be
a good leader, and the other one is that people can earn more money.
To begin with, learning about many skills enables a person to be more
knowledgeable. In this competitive society, people who are versatile can be
leaders. In other words, it is required for
people to have a wide variety of knowledge rather than one deep knowledge of a specific field. A person with sufficient knowledge
is regarded as ‘a person of intelligence’ while others who lack of
knowledge are simply ignored. For example, there
was a survey conducted by 기관, (템플릿에 입력을 안 하셨네요) with company CEOs as respondents. Leaders were asked, ‘what is the
most essential factors to be a leader?’.
An overwhelming 80% responded that comprehensive knowledge as the answer. This is because people who have
comprehensive knowledge are able to handle various tasks.
On top of that, if a person knows lot of skills, that person has a higher chance of getting money. In this
materialistic society, money is sometimes regarded as one’s power. If you have
no money, you will be ignored by people. So, in order to succeed you need to
make a lot of money, and this can be easier if
you have many skills. For example, my cousin, who is 5 years older than me, has
a job at a school as teacher. He is also very
good at playing the piano, so in weekends he goes to a café to
play music and earn some subside money. Because my cousin has multiple skills he is able to use
them to make even more money than he can as just a
teacher.
To sum up, developing different kinds of skills is
essential to be a good leader and can lead people to
make more money. In this regard, I firmly believe that in order to succeed you
need to obtain various types of skills.
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