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If Parents parents wish to see their children succeed
in life, I strongly support the opinion that they should set strict rules for
their children, at least untill they become the age of that they can take full responsibility
for their actions. I have been an English instructor for 19 years, teaching mostly
elementary and junior high students. Based on my experience dealing with that
age group, I have two 2 good reasons to believe so.
Children are on the growing stage, which
means they haven’t have not (에세이에서는 풀어써주세요!) fully developed to make the best decisions in different situations.
They are learning and it is their best interest to have a good guidance to move
onto the right path. Teaching Children children for such a long while, I have found the
most important help that they can get is consistency from their surroundings. My
young students learn the basic knowledge and routine activities they need
better when I’m stricter with my rules I set for them. If the parents are not
strict with their rules for their children, they can’t keep the consistency
their beloved young ones should receive get..
The children who have strict parents can be
more creative in a positive way since they have been trained to control
themselves. I think being creative plays a significant role in a successful
life. A lot of young children before they fully understand social rules can be
confused between being positive creative and being out of control, thinking they
should be able to do anything because they don’t have to take all the responsibility.
In my classes, a lot of students argue that they should work less and play more
because they are young. If I don’t set a strict rule to guide them to balance
between the two, they won’t be able to learn enough for their future life. I
believe that it would be the same at home.
As a teacher, I think I can understand what
is being a parent like caring for the children and my experience managing
children in class for many years, strict rules lay good foundations for them to
lead life to the success they want to achieve when they grow up (문장이 너무 길어지고 있고 이로 인해 전달하고자 하는 의미가 명확하게 들어오지 않습니다. 최소한 한번 정도는 잘라가주세요.).
총평: 실제로 영어를 가르치시는지는 모르겠지만 여하튼 영작 실력은 이에 맞게 상당히 좋으신 편이네요. 본론 문단들에서 너무 교직 관련 내용에만 의존하지 말고 부모님과의 연관성에 더 집중해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 이 외에는 큰 문제가 없습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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