▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is are abundant support to the author’s claim that there are many possible sources have been identified about ashen light. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s point.
First, the professor contends that Iit is impossible that the ashen light could be the result of a chemical process in Venus' venus’s atmosphere. SplitSplited into carbon monoxide and oxygen, light can be observed by using powerful telescope. But astronomers asutronomer used a simple telescope. So Iit must be something else. 복잡한 과정을 거쳐야 관측되는 것이 정상인데 단순관측으로도 측정되었으므로 화학반응이 아니다, 라는 흐름이 필요해 보여요. 지문 내용을 확인하셔서 더 정확하게 정리해주세요. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that chemical process causes this phenomenon.
Next, the professor insists that it is unlikely that the glow is sunlight reflected off clouds of Venus. venus. To be more detailed, detail, ashen light occurs very rarely. But Venus constantly emits the sunlight. The ashen light should would be detected more often if the source is were sunlight. This counters the reading passage’s assertion that the ashen light could simply be sunlight that is reflected back into space by the clouds of Venus. venus.
Finally, the professor argues that it can not be true that the glow is an aurora urorae. pPlasma contains particles that collide colide with atoms in the atmosphere and it enters a planet’s atmosphere. As a result, the aurorae can be maden . However, Venus does not have the plasma. So it can not make the aurorae. This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion suggesion that the energy produced by collisions takes the form of visible light, so they may be the cause of the ashen light observed on Venus.
Comment : 지문의 핵심 요소들이 어느 정도반영되어 있지만, 내용을 더 매끄럽게 연결해주면 좋을 것 같습니다. 실제 지문과 비교하면서 '어떠어떠해서 반대한다'라는 흐름이 더 잘 반영되도록 본론 내용을 다듬어보시면 좋을 것 같아요. 오탈자와 문법오류가 꽤 있으니 정확한 표현도 신경써주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise.
- Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.
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