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It is evident that in our society, education has tremendous importance in our lives. Some people think that children should have art and music as mandatory school subjects along with math, history, science, and language; while others do not believe this way. I however, believe that children have a right to choose the subjects that they want to learn. There are several reasons to support my argument. So, I will limit to the two the most relevant to the topic: the concept of specialist and interest.(What does that mean?) First of all, the most important reason for my thinking this way is that some children want to be become a specialist in a specific field. Commonly in society, people who have a specialty are welcomed and receive respects from others. Therefore, children need to be encouraged to select subjects that they are interested in. Take Yuna Kim, for example, she Yuna Kin is a world-famous figure skater. She and was interested in skating when she was seven years old. So, her parents helped her to learn how to skate well by hiring special trainers and did not force her to take mandatory subjects in school. Thanks to the parents' efforts, she not only obtained many medals from Olympics and competitions, but also became a world famouscelebrity in the field of figure skating. If she had had to take some subjects as mandatory in school, she would not have been able to make such wonderful achievements. Another reason why I think this way is that some children do not want to learn art and music. It is known that every child has different interests. Therefore, it is important to understand children's interest and help them to improve their abilities based on their interests. This reminds me of the time when I was ten. At that time, I was not interested in music subject because I was bad at singing. But, it was a mandatory subject. A day when I had a music class, I was late went to school late intentionally to avoid the class. It was a silly but it happened. As this experience shows, some children need to have opportunities to take classes that they are interested in. If I had a chance to take PE class instead of music subjects, I would not be late at school. (Evidence is not supportive enough) In conclusion, I believe that schools do not impose mandatory subjects on children for reasons such as specialist and efficiency. All things considered, with the reasons mentioned above, I believe that I have sufficiently and adequately explained my position on the matters regarding the topic.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 2 | Score | Limited/Fair 15-18 | - 조금만 더 빗겨나가면 off topic이 될 수 있을 것 같아요.
- Music과 같은 과목을 mandatory로 하는 것이 옳은가에 대한 질문으로 그렇게 되면 해당 과목을 즐길 수 없다 및 학생의 개개인적인 talent와 성취와 관련이 없어 도움이 되지 않는다는 형태로 잡아주셔야 맞습니다.
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