you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
the answer can be varied with people because the thing which people get interested in is all different (이 부분이 인트로에 있어서는 적합하지 않는 거 같습니다 좀 더 훅을 명확하게 서술하시길 바랍니다). However, if I were asked to choose, I would say that "how did you succeed" for the following two reasons.
First of all, the term of famous almost indicates success and we can just know the way to succeed by asking famous people as most famous people are successful, we can know how to achieve success (이걸 말하려고 한 것인가요?). To be specific, in modern society, people should specialize something or have the ability to attract other people otherwise, they cannot be famous. in certain aspect in order to become famous and successful. On this condition, if we ask famous people about the method how they succeed, it will benefit us because most of their method is beneficial to fluently communicate and make a good relationship with others easily so that we can acquire lots of beneficial advice. For example, when I was in a middle school, there was a boy who is the most popular guy in my school in the same class with me and one day I just asked him " why are you so famous and popular?" since I wanted to be popular as well. Then, l learned the particular way of communication he used and I was able to make a good atmosphere when I talked to other my classmates. What I mean by this is that we can get very meaningful information from the famous people by only asking.
Second, they liked what I ask them and it would make the conversation between me and the famous person more active. So, having a unique and large amount of personal connection is one of the most important factors to live a successful life in this world. (이 거랑 유명 인사에게 왜 너는 성공하게 되었냐랑 무슨 연관이 있는 건가요?) Since people cannot live alone and when they cooperate they can take several advantages from each other. Under this premise, if we make a famous person like us we would get some good opportunities to be successful. Therefore, I would ask that " how did you succeed " because it is one of the enjoyable topics for them to describe and if we show them our good listening attitude, they will like us. For example, according to an investigation of Tokyo University, most of people like to describe their success when they talk to others. The university got an interview with 100 middle-ages and they answered like this, I most want to talk about my success with regards to the question " what is topic which you most want to tell other people". What I mean by this is that since most of people like to say how they succeed if I ask famous people about this they will like us.
To sum up, we can obtain some useful information by just asking them and there is a high possibility to make a good relationship with them. In this regard, I would ask a famous person that "how did you succeed.
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