■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree of disagree with the following statement? Children in the past were more independent on their parents than those now. |
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▶ Your Answer :
I agree with this statement. I think now, people
have better financial conditions than before, and it affects the way parents spend
their time with children, moreover, children’s concept of life have also
changed.
First of all, as economic situation of the country
has been increased, current parents are generally wealthier than those in the
past. They can earn more money by less working than before, so they can invest to
their children financially and spend more time with children than in the past. For example, In the past, It was
rare to be given pocket money from parents after children become over 20year
old, but now, almost every children are given it, because their parents afford to
it that means current children are relying in their parents more than in the past.
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Second, current people have more interest
in their own life, so they want to enjoy their life and they care about
themselves more than those in the past, eventually, the average age of marriage
has been increased, it means children’s dependency age is also increased. In
the past, the average age of marriage was about 24-25, and they usually have baby
right away, but now it increased to about 29-30, and even though they get married,
they don’t want to have a baby early, therefore the amount of time of spending with
each other was extended and they are more likely to keep their ‘parents-children’
relationships longer by putting off having a baby.
In conclusion, because current parents can afford
more than those in the past and the average age of marriage has been increased,
I think children in the past is more independent than those now.
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