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There is a doubt that going to museums is best way to get to know a country. The answer to the question varies is vary depending on the individual's perspectives. After pondering from several view points, I am in favor of the opinion that there are better ways to get knowledge about a country. I feel this way for two reasons and I will explore following essay.
First of all, visiting museums is not convenient. Because I leaves in the countryside, it is difficult to go to big museums. One day, my teacher gave me assignments about our country. I wanted to gather some information like aid pictures of relics, however, remote museums deterred me from for going to museums for taking pictures. So, I decided to find photographs on the internet and I figured out that there are a lot of many information and pictures. To be specific, there are many pictures of potteries and descriptions. Even if, descriptions more detailed than information offered by museums. (What does it mean?) In conclusion, I think that using internet is more the most convenient way to know better get factors about a country. Moreover, looking over going to museums is not the best way to better make rememberance and understand about a country. I visited museums, which allowed me to see many China's Chinese remains. It was very intriguing and offered the significant knowledge. However, I could not easily recall what I had saw at museums. Eventually, I decided to go to China and it was remarkably different with visiting museums. After I traveled China, I could understand their cultures and meanings of their relics. If it were not for that trip, I would not understand the country as well. Understanding help me to remember this country. I think travel is the best way to understand and remember a country. To sum up, using internet is more convenient that going to museums. In addition Thus, travel is more conducive to understand a country than visiting museums. In this regard, I feel that museums do not offer the best opportunity to become knowledgeable about a country.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 3
| 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
- spelling error 가 상당히 많이 보이는 편이에요. 글을 마무리하시기 전에, 반드시 1-2분 정도 검토시간을 두어 spelling을 체크해보시기 바랄게요.
- information과 knowledge는 셀 수 없는 단어이므로 -s를 붙이지 않습니다. - online과 traveling을 하는 것이 나라에 대하여 더 잘 알 수 있다는 아이디어는 좋은 편이었습니다. 다만 그 아이디어를 구성하는 문장구조와, 문장력이 아쉽습니다. 보완이 필요해보입니다.
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