▶ Your Answer : Everyone likes to have good friends, no matter who they are. An intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether or not the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friend easily. It may seem true that the ability to make new friends is more important; however, a deeper analysis into such thought gives an insight into the confined nature of such thought. Even though people may be home to different ideas and opinions, (Meaning?) I personally support the idea that it is more important to keep retain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time in on account of two reasons: pain of losing an old friend, and aiding in the adjustance in a society. (What does it mean?)
To begin with, losing an old friend is very painful. For example, your old friend would probably have a lot of memories about you, and so would you, too. However, if you make new friends instead of keeping your old friends, you and your friend will both be stressed out and would feel a bit empty, since your friends and you have affection to each other. Like this case, old friends are hard to forget, for they have been spending a lot of time with each other. Furthermore, they would feel much painful than getting far with new friends, who they knew just a few days ago.
Secondly, long-term relationship aids in the adjustance in a new environment, (Unclear point) which one might feel a bit burdened to adapt in. By having an old friend whom one can rely on, one would be able to keep up (What?) by cheering up each other and understanding each other's feelings. That way, this old friend and one could adjust in individual's life in society better than people who only have new friends who aren't as reliable as old friends. In a nutshell, although it is open to interpretation whether or not the ability to maintain friend relationships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily, I personally believe that the capability to maintain long-term friendships with a small number of people is much more important because of the reasons discussed in this essay.
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