18. Think of a place that makes you feel relaxed and peaceful. Describe it and explain why it is relaxing and peaceful for you.
◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- peaceful에서 'pea-' 부분을 살짝만 더 길게 끌어주세요
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- I love calm down (?) and peaceful atmosphere
→ I love calm and peaceful atmosphere
- has big window
→ has a big window
- if I read my books at my desk on Sunday (혹시라도 some day면 some day는 이 문장에서는 문법적으로 맞지 않습니다) , I feel really peaceful and calm down
→ When I read my books, I feel really peaceful and calm.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 질문이 'describe it and explain why it is peaceful'인데 description 부분에서는 has a big window and a lot of books로 하셨지만 왜 peaceful한지에 대한 설명은 조금 부족했다고 생각해요. 더불어 if I read my books at my desk 부분은 주제에서 벗어난 내용입니다.
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