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◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- the professor explains two types of tears.
First, he talks about reflex tears. This is a physiological response. tears protect your eyes from dust, smoke and onions.
the mechanism is that our nerves send massage to our brain and then brain which then releases send hormones that produces tears to wash out the dust.
second, the professor says talks about psychic tears. this is emotional tears that flow when you are feeling emotions like sadness like sadness.
they improve your mode mood (?) by reducing removing stress hormones. Moreover, they perform as a natural painkiller When you feel physical pain due to an injury. so crying makes you feel better sometimes.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
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- 마지막 문장이 조금 아쉽습니다. 전체적으로 내용을 마무리해주는 문장으로 대체해주세요. These are two types of tears that the professor explains in his lecture식으로요.
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